Stop saying good for a first piece!! It's excellent for a first piece. Thogh i don't this is the first time he's written a poem...so t aint his first piece....(!)....

but yeah, this was very good. It flowed effortlessly. Bringing with it in depth imagery which played the chords in my mind well..

...i felt you could've ended it better. It seemed out of place, like it didn't do the rest of the piece justice (the last line). Just think you could've executed it better.

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