Shiznit's Thoughts:

VOCABULARY

>hmm very interesting use of words...i mean the fully understand fact of most vocabs that u used were exquisite...like they were made to be there...deep terminology....nice
>got some wordplay thrown out here and there....the multisare good but could be better...

i.e.
"Carefully We Silently Tread, Through No-Mans Land, Trying To Keep A Steady Hand...
We’re At Expense, Of The Generals Command, They Can Not Appreciate Us, And Understand"

^^^thats what im talking bout...although there was some touch of simplisticness...ur words stood out that made the reader understand and relate more to what ur talking about..props!

FLOW

>the hook came out pretty strong on this one....in sense of reading it aloud it made me get on with the whole scheme and it fits but some parts i was off..i think i suck at reading..hehe but that was good

CONTENT

>the whole patriotic theme was really the best way to come up with something very good like this one..Your creativeness in words and the subject matter really showed up how such a great writer u are and better...

OVER ALL..

> i dont usually rate pieces on here..cuz i think every1's unique in many ways...but it was fun reading this...i liked it a lot

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