i dont like the way you say shit and you change your voice like your asking a question.

like how you said fatality, in the begging that sounds gay,

you also sound like your scared to to rap, why are you so quiet? get into it and spit shit out with some feeling and energy.

dont be afraid to rap in front of your family if you cant rap infront of them you wont be able to rap infront of people in a concert.