Bribeone1: Like I tell everybody that chooses to write coming from different angles, I recommend coming from one (but that's probably because that's how I write! :\) Anyway, you put together a good piece, but I'm sure you can do better. The AIDS section was the most vividly-explained part, in my opinion.
Evolve: Imagery, imagery, imagery. Your ending decided the fate of my vote, but Bribe was right behind you. .
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Originally posted by Evolve
lifts his size twelves & delves into her stomach for fun
stomping my chances as my heart beat goes to none
the countdown started... three.. two... one...........
the beggining of The End, it was over before i begun.....
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Absolutely (insert cool adjective here).
VOTE: Evolve