Shiznit's Thoughts:

VOCABULARY

>hmmm.. youve thrown a couple of masterful words (i.e. tyranny, recliner, petefile?) thats really good. I mean the way u used the terms slightly reflected the completion of this piece..brilliant!..the fact that you used only subtle words...your words stood out and refined as i read it. The choice of words affects the outcome..and u did good but u couldve put in some more for it to be perfect but either way its brilliant.

FLOW

> line by line..word by word....rhyme by rhyme...it showed that you really make the smooth path of this piece to fit in every letters evenly. When i read it ...it showed how u can just speak every word and not hold out any awkwardess...that was good

CONTENT

>ahhhh the imagery....that definitely is the BEST thing that i can give a 1st price on....i mean the emotions and how the was i read it while putting pictures inside my head...its like im there looking at it and seeing it...Oyr imagination is definitely the best thing in every human being...its free....u can be whatever u want ..u can do whatever u want...u can even see what ever u wanna see and be whenever u want to be...amazing huh??...props for the whole emotional shit goin on...

OVER ALL

>definitely not a worthless read...i liked it

__________________
<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>