Shiznit's Thoughts:
VOCABULARY
>not very much in it....just a couple of deep exciting...and meaning full words thrown out...the terms used are very typical meaning its just ordinary. but sometimes ordinary can become extraordinary...if u couldve put in more vocabs it would be really awesome.
>add some more metas and descriptive words..then ur all good.
FLOW
>in depth...its like its made for those words to fit in ya know...except for one line...but its just a small thing and it doesnt really affect much of it....nice job!
CONTENT
>im awed by the fact that the whole theme of the poem is definitly emotional and very realistic. THe imagery was WHOA! ya know...the very meaning of the whole piece made this piece really stood out with out using wordplays creativelely...
OVER ALL
>nice read....just one thing...if u want more feedbacks...you might want to feedback on some other pieces so they would really know that u really peep their stuff too and that ur eager to share what u have and at the same time acknowledge something that they have...but the poem was really good.