Shiznit's Thoughts:

VOCABULARY

>plain and simple words combination..not too much in it...the repetition of 'myself' i thought it was great but when i read it a couple of times ...hmm...i think it aint necessary but thats a good appraoch tho...its just when u read it...its quite off...u couldve tried to put in alternative words for 'myself' ya know...
>try experimenting words by reading off the previous ones then refining it to fit in there altogether.

FLOW

>wasnt really feelin it....cuz some lines were short and some were long and its kinda not smoothly follow the straight path that u were trying to target here...if u consider using some rhyme scheme..that would help a lot.

CONTENT

>suicidal thoughts..very common...the emotions, pains and anger all were written here in ur piece...the imagery was ok...but couldve been better..

OVER ALL

>not a waste of time to read...it was good. nice job

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