this was good..although to make it a it better and maybe longer you ould have included why you felt the rage.like maybe what broke you two up..what happened...that will make people read on and ive only got one thing to say about you hating her..and this is true

You cant hate someone untill youve let them into your soul

so a feel foryoui on that level

id like to see the piece finished so get on it! lol