Shiznit's Thoughts:

The introduction set the whole scene straight and just started the story using plain refined words. As i read it..i actually liked the dialogue along the lines. It made it sort of unique at some points.

The essense of terminology didnt quite work out that well but u make it a point that ur trying to put in more to make it understandable. If you couldve throw in a couple of deep words here and there..that might be better.

The flow and rhyme scheme was alright..some lines just actually didnt fit in at some parts but some made it through. nice job.

The content was very emotional but the fact that ive read some similar stuff that ended to death is sorta getting too typical for me. but its fun reading this.

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