Shiznit's Thoughts:

VOCABULARY

>yes indeed...uve made ur point that u actually used a couple of deep contstructive words that made this piece stood out but the fact that u actually executed some of them on the wrong side of the piece...some terms couldnt really fit in on some lines and most of them are actually are a bit too emphasized...but for some reason ur choice of words were actually good.
>some metas were actually seen and it was structured rather simple. props for that.


FLOW
>it wasnt that bad. The rough edges at some parts affected the whole drop flow thing. Recreate the lines a bit and i know for sure it would actually bring out the best of this whole verse. Some were just off but it was good,

CONTENT

>not too much in it...eye catching..hmm it might be. The representation of the whole image and actions was not bad at all. It applied to the whole idea of theme.


OVER ALL

>nice..good read. keep them comming and yeah if you would just allow a couple of ur time to reply to other stuff.and give at least a bit of comments and help out a bit.....that would be appreaciated by us. Thanks!

P.S.

Might wanna reconsider dropping something on Rhetorical Insights. It would be so fun reading what u gonna put on there. Thanks!

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