Shiznit's Thoughts:
very well executed words. The whole theme acted upon on something that made me think that ur actually talking about someone that you love. FOr some reason i didnt even think that u actually misplaced or prolly made a u-turn and switched from one thing to another....just like what they said...the feeling that you structured on the intro made it assuming for us to think that ur talking about ur girl but at the end it turned out someone more important than that.
the purpose of restating some lines could make this a bit better.
this was worth reading...keep them droppin...
...might wanna drop some replies to others as well...it would be very appreciated.
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