Shiznit's Thought:
hmm...interesting..but not what i expected tho...
The whole piece required something that would actually improve a bit of creativeness...hmm im not saying that it was bad but the structure of the poem reflected on its flow and meaning as well...so if u construct it well then it would be good.
The theme was actually self explanatory...that uve somehow respected and keen for those people and enthustiastically sent them messages from ur heart..thats good.
it wasnt that bad at all..but couldve been better if it was executed well...
p.s.
if u drop the ~~~~~~ and the .......... maybe it would be appealing to the reader....u cannot emphasize something using those symbols....emphasize them by words.
...and if u have time...go check out our rhetorical insights. Just drop something that you actually think its worth reading...cant hurt to try. 
thanks!