Shiznit's Thoughts:

Alright...here goes my constructive critism...hehe

The way u structured this piece was brilliant!...The chosen words actually showed that its meaning was indeed great...

When i read this ..i was thinking of something like the Medieval Ages...somewhere along knights and kings and warriors and stuff like that...lol

The flow fits perfectly. U used bar by bar rhyme scheme. it was good but the fact that it was short somehow made me think that it lacked something.

Whole content of it was pretty much interesting...but you left me hanging at the end and i know that u couldve make the ending even better. The truth is..if you couldve put this and recreate it or prolly add more a bit of interesting stuff in it like i mean getting in depth with the whole battle thing..that would be awesome. I like some more action..but either way...this one was good..


i liked it..

P.S.

hmm...wanna try dropping something on Rhetorical Insights??..what u gotta lose??? NONE. hehehe.. thanks!

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