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Old 07-23-03, 07:58 PM   #12
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nice shit from Gangsta...u had some tight ass rhymes homie....and Hypnotic....work on rhyming more...and u'll have this shit down pat too aight....anyway...

Best Line from Hypnotic:
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about what im 'sayin sprayin' nothing but 'snipers and rifles'/
'barbarically' remove his 'kidneys' and other 'organs' so vital//

'killin u softly' like 'Lauren hill' with these 'words'//
'fuck wit me dog' u be in the 'dirt' with 'earthworms'//

i mutate ya 'body' like 'mutations of chromosomes'//
I put 15 bullets to ya 'head' 'split ya dome'//
nice shit here....Lauren Hill line was nice...lol....

Best Line from Gangsta One:
Quote:
I I spit in ya'll "faces"/ ma punchlines leave ya so metephorically bloody, ya'll need hyperbolic "braces"/ "disgraces" of RB showni' they "racist"/ jus' fo sayin' 'nigga' gets dem a lyrical "facelift"/ tha list 'o katz merk'd worn on ma wrist like a "bracelet"/ Vertz r only honored ta face me, "face it!"//

$Bar 3$
Hypnotic's like a lil' "bitch"/ He's mo fuckin' homo-sexual than "Lilo and Stitch"/ I've killed dis faggot mo times in this rhyme alon, than da Godfather killed a "snitch"/ Hypnotic's jus' a disease, hangin' 'roun like an uncurable "itch"/ Hypnotic merk'd me befo, but I've flipped da lyrical "switch"//

$Bar 4$
I myself got ma rhymes "lifted"/ Like crack, ma rhymez get ya'll niggaz "addicted"/ when I unleash ma rhymes, I unleash da "wicked"/ I've jus' left Hypnotci lyrically "evicted"...//
ur opener and closer was weak...but ur body of ur verse was pretty ill...nice punches all over...tight lines...and u rhymes mad ass shit...

Overall: i think Gangsta One took this....nothing hard on Hypnotic...just work on a lil' more complexity with ur verses...u nah mean homie....keep the shit up u two...

BREAKDOWN
Multis - Gangsta One
Vocab - Gangsta One
Metas - Gangsta One
WordPlay - Gangsta One
Flow - Hypnotic (Gangsta ur barz are too strung out)
RhymeScheme - Gangsta One
Creativity - Gangsta One
Complexity - Gangsta One
Violence - Gangsta One

Vote - Gangsta One

peace
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