Shiznit's Thoughts:
On Blunt-MC's verse
VOCABULARY/WORDPLAY
>alright...the intro was actually good. It made me wanna read to the end. You used really simplistic terms that made the whole verse attached to every line. I agree with Bash and D...the very construction of vocabs lacked at some point where u could actually substitute some other words for it. If u coudve made the whole terminology interesting...it would be much better.
FLOW/RHYME SCHEME
>you showed the idea of refining each line to perfectly fit the flow. It was smooth but off with a bit of fragmentation at some parts that made the flow slid a little. I read it a couple of times actually and it wasnt that bad because of the rhyme scheme used. Props for that.
CONTENT
>very well thought out...your verse reflected the fact that you actually know what ur talking about and not just thrown out words that dont even make sense. youve made ur verse quitely understandable...well done!
On WORDPERFECT's verse
VOCABULARY/WORDPLAY
>very well chosen words coming from you. You've mixed a bunch of terms with some level of grossness but brilliant!
(i.e."HANES..... underwear recycled 3 generations urine yellow color-")...uhhh..okay enough of that ..but u got to the part where u can almost pinpoint the whole insanity slashed reality of being poor. Reluctantly..the fact that uve made the picked vocabs outcasted some of the plain words that u used.
FLOW/RHYME SCHEME
>fits smoothly...the whole sense of matter reading all throughout showed that it was executed well and turned out to be the best verse from the rest....Well one or two lines kinda turned the other way but u made it turn back so that it flows the same again.
CONTENT
>The whole theme was fantastic. The inside basis of the piece depicted the outside incentive that made it really interesting to read. Motivated contents really outburst the fact that it was realistic. nice job!
On Master Blaster's verse
VOCABULARY/WORDPLAY
>a couple of metas thrown out here and there. Terms were used hardly enough to recreate something out of it. Incredible decision of combining such words with a bit of excitement. Some are a bit confusin but i read it a few times then i realized some of the constructed words were meant to be there.
FLOW/RHYME SCHEME
>definitely on it. It seems to me that uve considered using some technique but i dont know maybe im wrong
that made ur verse stood out. It was smooth..from top to the end...well done.
CONTENT
>hmmm...ur kinda off the point but if u like put ur ideas all together and sum it up...it would prolly head the same way as the other guys's main point. Luckily, it amused me. Got me all interested whats inside ur mind...quite frankly..i dont want to but for some reason those words came out strongly.
OVERALL
hmmm...i really liked this one...three individuals ideas and concepts combined. pretty amazing!..it was fun readin it.
well i dont really rate open mics so all i can say to this is
DOPE!...<------hope thats enough for u master blaster...