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Old 07-25-03, 11:14 AM   #2
bouncedoggydog
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*I liked this piece*

Your flow was smooth, the content was deep, and your message very important. I liked your approach, you did not come off as over heated, but concerned...Good job,,

I would suggest you use better imagery, emotion was good, but it would have been elevated a notch with some vivid imagery.

Keep up the post's, I'll be watching for your work...


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