Rhyming/Flow
It Took Me 4 or 5 Lines To Get INto THis But I'm Glad I Did. Apart From The First Few Lines, It Flowed Pretty Consistantly Throught, Especially The 2nd Verse, Which Was Superior To The First. You had Good Interbar Rhyming Too...7/10

Vocab/Wordplay
I Thought This Was Lacking. I Don't Really Feel Pieces That Use Addv. Words Like "U", "2" etc....The Wordplay Was Good THough: "end ur dreams, burn my ties & sink ur familys boat,
let them swim in the tears they weap"....6/10

Concept/Topic
Never Strayed Away, You Kept The Feelings n' Emotion Throught The Song, ..8/10

Overall
Can't Wait Too See This When It's Done - Maybe Made INto An Audio? Anyway, As I said Up Your Vocab And It Should Be Tight - 7/10

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