What the fook you doing here?!



But seriously. This was dark realism.

Right from the start it had an essence of extremity. Which you built upon using a kind of real surrealism.

I presume by 'petafile' you mean 'paedophile'.

Well that also bridged another gap. She wasn't THAT young, but young enough for one to be known as a paedophile for 'taking' her.

From there on you went into the more graphic and darker part of the situation. I felt you did that fairly well. Though you could've gone into his and her mentality/emotions a bit more. Still, you'd done that fairly well before (his anyway), and lightly treaded upon with this part.

The turning of sexual desire to death was slightly predicatable. But i felt effective within the context of this piece. And the irony at the end fairly well executed. Once again slightly predictable, but nonetheless effective.

Overall a good, strong piece. In which you weren't afraid to get youir hands dirty. Most people fuck these kinds of pieces up. You did a fairly good job of if though.

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