Yeah, this was a freestyle alright. I dunno, you say you don't to that much poetry, so all i can say is i appreciate when people do this. But it seems to me like though you sat down and started typing off the top of your head (i apprciate that art when done sparingly..) but then you tried to control it slightly (which i can also appreciate) but not too well.

Still, i can see a good writer in there. And it did have some good moments, both here and there, and overall (when you dig a bit, emphasis on BIT!)..

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