wow!
nice peiic. it was raw true and held a viscural detatchment that landed the poem inside of a well written catigoryyy. at first i thought it was just another aingst peiiice. but as I read on it held more correct emotion in the sence in which it was written. inside the curses and imagrys. I was satisfied at the end. and thats what you want with that type of peiiice. keep it up!