I think you could have done some things idfferent here. It is a great topic, and the message has great potential, I just thinks it was a little soft. You could have used more imagery, and turn up the emotion... Emotion wa there, but very little rushe out at me. The flow was good, but overall the piece was simple. Needs more complexity and elevation. I have seen some of your drops, you are capable, just reach for it. Great message, and goos flow...

Respect...

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