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Old 07-28-03, 01:41 PM   #4
MuhThugga
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That was terrible. The structure was, well.... it was completely void of any structure.
If you would like to call those things "lines," and for the sake of trying to find a word in the dictionary to describe them better, those "lines" were horribly set-up.
There is something called rhythm. Find it, and utilize it.

Think of a concept when you write, don't just say stupid shit about how much you smoke and that you can get drugs for others.
Dead Prez - DOPE (Drugs Oppress People Everyday)

And lastly, do not rhyme words for the sake of rhyming. Ever think that a line or two DOESN'T HAVE TO RHYME.
And if you rhyme words, make sure that the rhyme fits and makes sense. Ex:
"Cause dim bullets be hissin if missin my main position.I'm playin ta win,and while you other niggas dissin"

Makes no sense^^^

Elevate, you really need to. And whether or not you choose to take in what I said is up to you. You may go about your own ignorant ways. I don't care.
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