yo you got nice wordplay and a lot of meta's but you should think about working on your flow try and stay on a consistent sound i'm not hating you're good but elevate it is dope funny content but again the words don't move there is a lot of stop and start in your words make it move like water. Look i don't have the strongest punches i don't use a lot of meta's or multi's but i make the words fluid. keep writing though it wasn't bad