I like the honesty in your post, you never claimed to be a poet, you just let the words flow. Can't be mad at ya for that. Raw emotion should never be confined, when you have an urge to release, there is no set structure to follow or emulate. Just put them thoughts down with honesty, the rest will follow. Don't bother yourself with style and structure yet, until your comfortable with your abilities, then you can style swap. I think for a first time peotic freestyle you did great. Area's of you piece reflected this, keep dropping. It can only help you elevate your RAPs at the same time... Might as well , cuz everyone here can be better than they are today, yes everyone...

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