This was actually one of the best pieces pieces i've seen from you in my hazy memory.

The depth was intriguing, dug shallow yet still must work to find.

The imagery was fitting. I went well what you were 'getting out'.

Though maybe over-doing certain parts. A bit more compression would probably benefit it.

But overall, a quite fine piece. I can see that within each one of your pieces there are 'masterpieces' (of 'short' poetry, which you seem to concentrate on) bursting to get out.

I think the key is compression. Because from what i can see at the moment, most of the other things are already there.

Oh, and as well as percieving another thing. I also got a little message out of it directed to some people *shuffles feet* here at RB. I am sure they know of your talent. And there has merely been a lapse in communication and overall understanding on both sides.

..resp....