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Old 07-31-03, 04:41 PM   #4
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Originally posted by Mystik Mind
No Hard Hiting Punches...You Need To Work On That...Also I Didnt Like Your Structure...Its Like Your Doing Bullet Points Wit Numbers...Just Lay It Out Normally...

Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah//
Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah//
Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah Blah//

Easier To Follow And Looks Better...Try To Add Decent Multie's And Wordplay To Sharpen Up Your Verse...It Will Come Over Time But Good To Know What You Gotta Include...

So I'll Give You A Generous 4/10
Not Being Harsh...Just Real...


^^werd to that good advice, i would just also recommend tryin to use more metas, like relating things ex. from latest battle:
This is supposed to be my day off, so watch me put "shells" in this "beech"
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