look kid this is most likely your first post and probably your first rhyme so i'm gonna put it like this your shit was wack from the start. the reason i say from the start is cause that first bar had no rhythm what so ever it sounded like some shit that would have been spit baack when cats first started thinkin of rap the shit was garbage aight but let me go on every line after that got worst and worst who taught you to break bars and lines cause without the flow i couldn't tell where the fuck you tryin to rhyme and shit basically you need to go and see how other cats spit on this site that way there may be a chance for your ass to sharpen up.

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shut the fuck up

even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

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little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun