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Old 07-31-03, 11:10 PM   #6
DaGyrlRemarqabL
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I LOVED this.
This was so sweet and lovely, far more than a "roses are red" type of deal. Really original concept, rhyme scheme was a bit simple at times, but the overall content made up for it.
My 2 favorite parts were:

>Harsh words I did say
Back in my younger day
Anger and frustration’s not the way
For your love, I now pray
By myself, I now stay
A lesson learned, the hardest way
A good man molded, just like clay
Love no lie, alone today

and

>Bless you on this very day
Right besides you, I yearn to lay
Remember the promise I made that day
To forever love and forever stay
To always guide you along your way
To protect and comfort day to day
I am forever sorry for my actions and old ways
Love no lie, hold the one you love today

I really enjoyed reading this.
Stay up and keep elevating.
Pz.
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