dis pressure got me trip trip tripping,
n I seize it but it keeps slip slip slipping

~Trip Trip Slip Slip Chops Up The Flow~

I was at tha part when it was questions I lack,
I know dem, now all I ask is feedback /

~A Tad Of Wordplay...Make Yourself Stand Out And Say Things
Like Nobodyy Else Would Say Them To Not Sound Like Everyone~
~This Is Good So Far...Some Words Taken Out Will Make It Flow
Smoother Through And Through~

~Is Your 212 Words Significant..Or Are You Just Keeping Track?~
~Your Second Verse Is Much Better Than Your First~

~Overall This Was A Decent Read The First Verse Could Be Revised Some For Your Future Song...Keep Elevating~

You Do Not Have To Do This But To Make Eachother Better
In This Forum We Need Feedback As Well ( Everyone )
Im Not Saying Hey Lookatme! And Im Not Expecting A
Lengthy Reply Either....Just Give Others Feedback
As Well Because Nobodys Perfect

Peace