Ok, of course he's going for the Eminem stlye he has no choice he's white!!!??!!

Anyway, You lyrics are definately on point, but the "opie" in your voice is what kills it for me. The flow is shakey, but I think thats from readin it. More feeling please, make us feel what you sayin. Good effort, kudos to ya chick too (gotta pic) lol just kiddin, but for real I know you gotta pic...ha ha gotcha again...but I'm sayin though........