Seemed more of a battle verse than an open mic piece in my opinion, flow was pretty good, wordplay was mainly basic but you have potential, work on your vocab a little more, and dont use any punches about Shit / Diarrea, all of those are played my man.

Not a bad first attempt though, you'll need a lot of work before you become dope, but just keep writing and eventually you'll get better.

Reply to mine: Wonderful Women. .