o for the loe of god would u jus quit ur complainin Deceit it was a damn good piece but don u reilize bounce had nothing to do with rippin or disgracing the islamic culturture as u can see he fully understands both sides of the story he knew tha befor he wrote the piece he even said befor his piece not to take it in the wrong way and


"This another piece I wrote soon after 9/11 I submit with all respects to race culture and religion, please do not take it in the wrong way. Just going off the emotion I had brewing inside me, as if I was the country talking for myself. "

so jus drop it and quit arguing everyones here and droping to get good feedback so thgey can elevate, thas wha this site is all for to elevate and (my thoughts) if ur not here ta do the get the fuck out

by the way bounce hell of a nice drop


FLOW it was good and solid went from word to word line ta line
TOPIC i can really feel ur anger but catch no hate in ur piece it was very good, u staid on topic didnt overkill it but limited it to stay at a level were it got clearly across
WORDPLAYi loved it it all flowed together and the vocab wasnt simple at all it was excellent every word brought the reader more into it as a whole
OVERALL i give it a 9/10
CRITISIM to me tho the lines did seem a lil short (but thas jus prolly me) it had a lil on the light side of complexity but it was all good (have to give ya some critisism


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