to start off i'll say i like this poem. i appreciate this poem, this poem must be made. However this topic has been slain beyond buffy's wildest imagination. lol I really liked this piece but my only critisism is that i only saw words,i may be alone on this one but i didnt really feel the effort and the work and the emotion it felt almost forced at times and golden at others, my favorite line was "Golden phrases wafting through crimson skies, with tearstreeked cheeks/" that line i felt, i didnt have much probs with the flow to be honest. Another thing if u prefer not rhyming or it feels better wut have u, then do u and dont let niggas knock ur hustle im feelin your style u definitely showin that u can right and if u have more consistency to bring emotion like in the above line your poems will be works of art to even the most spiteful hater, many props, 1luv.