aight once again u proved to me tha u r a damn good writer this should b an audio

FLOW it was good had structre always important but i wasnt feeling it in spots it seemed as tho it skipped around ther

WORDPLAY/VOCAB it was good u used strong words to show powerfull emotion but didnt overkill it but to me u underkilled it in some spots like the emotion you had seemed to fade out a lil bit but then iit came back i see the u rnt goin for rymes but tha u are goin with thoughts and emotions wqhich is not only creative but it is also uniuqe not many do tha

TOPIC it was a good choice but unlike your other pieces this topic is rarely used so u scored more points there u kept on topic well u didnt stray between 2 of them or get off track much it had structure and creativity and aslo complexity u hit all 3 of the major areas ther

OVERAL
9/10


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