yo, basic... the first guy seemed like half the time he was just rhymin' words... you're try'n to get too complex when u don't yet have the skill... my tip to both is keep it simple stupid.. lol... the second guy 4five.. you had the better verse, seemed you knew more about the topic, most wouldn't've picked up on it, but I do alot of drugs.. I liked the lne "OOPS! didnt mean 2sniff ur line kid, was jus sein if ur line smelled like mine did//",.... shit was funny as fuck.. I gotta do that to someone... lol.. you also seemed to try to be too complex in ur bars.. it fucks up the flow, also try to keep the lines around the same length, 8-16 syllables.. depending on if it's fast or slow... peace, keep elevatin'

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