umm i guess i dont fit into your requested poetic clientele but i thought i'd peep wut u was servin it was a chill piece, it kinda painted a picture it was a little OVERgraphic in my opinion it was kinda sensual and then it got a little rough at the edges but it was descriptive and u got your point across, i dont want to dwell on its low peaks but the ending didnt do the rest of the poem justice though it is very real, i feel it overall, good job, could u drop an opinion on my piece dogg? just askin dont feel obliged, 1luv.