Sup D.S.
I was feelin this..and not just cuz ima lady (even tho that was some of it, heh) But really, the imagery was very intense, the flow made it easy to follow, and the piece itself just drew you into it.

>take a break after a while so i can roll some reefer, sounds dont pound louder than us from tha speaker,

That was my favorite ^part, it just rolled off my tongue when I read it..
Great execution of an age old concept~gettin it in~
Ive always wanted to try writin a piece like this...
would've been nice to read the end, if it got cut off like you said.
Nicely done tho.
Pz and propz.