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OK... this is the first open mic i'm gonna reply to so don't kill me if i don't do it right.

Maybe its their curved behinds, maybe their rounded breasts
Often i find myself captivated by a womans Mounds of Flesh
^Ok, those two first lines were good cuz they got my attention to keep reading it further.

Hours ive spent in admiration of their toned hourglass figures
Watching outta my window, in every Female i see a Princess
^That was nice, and the ending was sweet.

Its been said maybe im obsessed with the opposite sex, but
now women call me Carpenter...always waking up to Wood.
^LOL... that was funny but it didn't rhyme to much... but i saw what you said bout your accent so ok.

I maybe should learn to settle down, but its real hard at night
now im in & out of ladies knickers, more than a transvestite.
^Heh, that was good, not the best line though.

Impressed by simply things, like their hair, or how they talk
Mainly because my Sex Drives . . them up the fucking wall!
^Heh... liked the wordplay, nice.

with luck i'll discover the girl who'll stay true, make me change
& meet Mrs. Right, im just prayin her first name isnt "Always"
^Nice line, but again the whole no rhyming thing.

But for now im enjoying the summer, and i dont mean to gloat
i got bitches and budweiser . . im taking the Tops off of both.
^Best line, mad me actually laugh out loud, i was laughin for like five minutes.

Most guys arent looking for love, just a girl to fuck for a while
but for me its different.. .im after personality and a cute smile.
^That was deep? I think so, and i know where you're coming from.

nothing too wild, just a woman to call mine and give my heart
because women are wonderful creatures, presents from God.
^Nice ending to a semi-comical, serious piece with the presents from God.

Overall nice piece, it was comical at times... but it quickly went back to bein serious... so i give it a border line 8/9 out of 10.