Sup 2%..
I dont think I've read anything from you before but I was really feelin this..Never read anything like it before..I liked how you were able to switch back and forth in the dialogue without making it confusing, also the structure, I thought, added emphasis to certain lines, rather than having it all bunched together in one paragraph..I also liked the whole baseball theme, how it was touched on literally and metaphorically in the beginning, middle, and end of the poem.
I thought this showed mad creativity and abilty on your part, and
I look forward to reading more from you.
Nice work.
Pz.