A true story (apart from the end of course)?

Either way, it was felt. It had a truth to it. A gritty, raw personal truth to it. The imagery was slightly lacking. I felt for what you were writing, ti could've been a bit better. Also seemed a bit cut off at certain parts. Like it was made up of emotional bursts and put together. Not as flowing. But then again, that gave the piece a kind of un-cut and raw feel to it.

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