I kinda get the feeling from reading this that the words you chose are quite the same as what you wanted to say exactly.

But anyway, this peice can really flow off the tongue. Except for the last two lines in the second verse, it went off rather flawlessly. It was rather seemingly mundane, but it had that emotion of longing that permiated throughout it. And that was done clear and concise.

So this was a pretty well done peice all around.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.