i'm not gonna voet cuz i voted on fatal's last battle..but fatal try not to do ur lines spaced like that make a bar:

blahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblah
blahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblah//

then space...see wut i'm sayin..cuz like that u make it hard for people to read ur verse cuz it throws them off

jus a lil advice..and jiggy..i'm sorry..but wtf is up wit that name???