This may be your first poem on RB but I can definatly tell that you are no amature at writting! I loved the flow in this peice, all the rhyming and the constant emotion that I felt comming out of this was amazing...
"nectar sweet going down, but in the belly its bitter"
I loved that line poetically because it was truth but written well.
"YOU GOTTA DROP YOURSELF DOWN IF YOU WANNA RAISE HELL!!"
I loved that line period, that should be on a key chain or somethin man, that was great... You most definatly have skills, I saw so many things going on at one time in this piece that I had to read it over and over, not because I was confused just because I liked the picture I was seeing and I enjoyed that feeling... Well written and welcome to RB. Peace