Wasup? Is this my boi from Uf...? (The Misses here)
Anyways, to the poem:

Wonderful vocabulary, the rhyming kept this peice flowing beautifully and shows of a very talented writter. I was amazed at what Var got outta this, he's soo deep ::dreamy eyes:: jk. If that was is then wow, you get some dreamy eyes too! But back to seriousness: I felt like the alliteration did a lot for this peice, even if it wasn't deliberate, which I doubt because you seem to be very skilled. My favorite line in this peice was
"for the evil in men is set not unto the world by demons
but by men"
This was a thinking peice and I loved every word... I'll make it a point to start checkin out ya peices more often, because you are truely gifted bud... peace