was an good peice bit played but i did one on this topic before too
deep thougts were put in this peice it seemd

QUOTE"Slowly urging the pain to just go away,
crying for it to just go but it continues to stay.
Keep on feeling confused and trying to understand why,
you know you're alive but you wish you would die.
Can't seem to understand the things that keep happening to you,
wanting only an explanation for the things you do.
''QUOTE
that there was really deep lots of emnotions which is always good
if there was maybe one thing to make the next peice better would be to pick a topic that aint as played had good techinque in doing this peice and was vey foward and ryhing was there but yet poetry aint always bout ryhmin
8/10 nice job much respect to fellow poets