hrm sounds coo. pretty nice actually

things that may help:

1. Phrasing - This is a big problem i see on rb. You may have a dope line but try switching around the words to make it more hard hitting

2. Voice - Pretty good emotion but in the beginning and throughout some parts u stressed your voice. It makes u sound weak. The average person may not catch it.... i dont know but thats my opinion

~thier was some otha stuff but forget it this was pretty hot. keep it up.