I like your pieces cuz they speak of the things around us that are so true. It was a little short but thats okay cuz the point got across there was no need for more really. You can feel your respect and your anger with just a little bit of sadness. I think this was great.

"Treatment unfair, yet you demand toleration
Since I was 5 you had my utmost admoration
All I'm asking for is a little congratulations!"