~pratically particular to secular sections of self salvation
praising the faces of the faceless racists in this nation~

close to Chali2NA(Tuna) catching eyes quick homie...
hes in his own world..nobodys better than close...

~pictures painted are looked at with undisguised disdainment
tainted by "sainted" places as a secular entertainment
awake by a change in nature on a mission of spiritual attainment
in vain i rack my brain to solidify our holy estrangement~

this is good but it seems like you just went fishing
for words here instead of just writing it..which isnt
bad either...but may make the vocabulary
seem "false" reading it

in your third section you flow got lost after about
your forth line....then you got it at the end...
you might speed up but I doubt it looking at
its structure...mid tempo...

Simply needs more emotion and less fabrication......

Deciets not knockin...im not knocking...were crew...
and your pure talent...but dig deep in yourself for that..
write throgh wrters block instead of searching for
words to connect.

Peace

~Content~