Lots and Lots of imagery. There were times when i felt I was in the place that your mind was watching.

i.e--Everything was bare,
The grass still green,
But everything was still.

Although the land was fresh,
I was surrounded in death,
It was eerie and concerning,
It worried me, and made me ill,
So immediately I fled.

It flowed decently and gave me goosebumps actual goosebumps. I don't believe in revamping editing or changing anything thats written down but i will read Pt. 2 eagerly. Thank you for the experience.