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Old 08-15-03, 05:33 AM   #10
LaRyan Shabaz
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This was not particularly close for me.
Anti Hero's verse may have been a bit fellatio-oriented, but he did have a centralized theme of religion, as well as some wordplay and I had no problems with the flow. There were punches as well. It was a fairly consistent drop, hard to point out best and worst lines.

Restricted seemed to rhyme-to-rhyme. Lots of shit didn't make sense. Say for instance...

instantly fallin 2 crisp and crumble..yo mistakin me as a bee but with out the bumble//
u startin 2 hullicionate//but ur d/r boyz probably can relate/cuz u be givin head at and outragiou rate//

Why can his boys relate because he gives head at an "outragiou" rate?? And the bee without the bumble? Holy shit dude... nah.

no ~never~/i couldnt believe it i thaught the warlords were more clever// but bullshit so W/E//

?! Well, simply working on the flow an layout would help for technical measure. Which you need polishing on. Your third bar could come closer to meeting the mess of words on the second bar. perhaps a simply, happy "what-the-fuck-ever" Helps.
Speaking of... type out WHATEVER, so people don't have to decipher your internet-speak. Kills the flow.
In addition... come up with something more clever than tossing in "whatever". Do you frequent shopping malls and wear shell necklaces???


Driftin' like driftwood... dope fucking simile there.
Sting Rays? Holy shit...

violently slapin ur ass as though a baby bein disobdient//but unlike that im not gonna be leinent

Disregarding the gramatical mistakes of misdirection against english... how is striking a child lenient??

Woodpecks? Fucking ridiculous dude.

Seriously, your stuff upset me with the lame effort.
Especially when you have a well-established winning record.
Who did you beat???
Sorry couldn't get more feedback on Anti-Hero.

But,

Vote=Anti Hero